初三中考复习讲座 　　 　　写作篇 　　 　　优秀水平标准 　　 　　1.        能准确运用词汇和句型结构，较生动和详细地描述情境或叙述所给话题，能准确自如地表达态度和感情。 　　 　　2.        能用流畅的语言组织常见体裁的短文，逻辑清楚，结构完整，层次清晰，内容充实，问题恰当。 　　 　　3.        能在写作中恰当地引用资料，能用谚语、俗语等，能清楚地阐述自己的观点和评述他人的观点，具有一定的人文意识。 　　 　　内容分（7分） 　　 　　是否紧扣主题，是否涉及到所要求的几个方面 　　 　　学会审题（写人物，写事件，写物件，写场所，写感想） 　　 　　03 年       To be a lovely Shanghainese (做一个可爱的上海人) 　　 　　04年          Leaving school (毕业时分) 　　 　　05年          Growing pains and gains (成长的烦恼与快乐) 　　 　　06年          I have a dream (我有一个梦想) 　　 　　07年          Things I hate to do (我不喜欢……) 　　 　　08年          Love around me (我身边的爱) 　　 　　09年          I want to do something for my school (我想为学校做点事) 　　 　　10年          I am proud of myself  (我为自己感到骄傲) 　　 　　Chinglish 　　 　　1.        I want to buy a present for every taught me teacher. 　　 　　2.        School’s cleaning is everyone’s face. So our face must be cleaned every day. 　　 　　3.        I is very confidence I can eat five chicken everyday. 　　 　　4.        Sometime the playground are pieces of paper. Some students look like no see. 　　 　　5.        I want to clean the fans, the fans are tall, but I’m not short, so it’s easily. 　　 　　常见错误 　　 　　1.        句型单一 　　 　　2.        东拉西扯 　　 　　3.        时态错误 　　 　　4.        用词不当 　　 　　5.        结构松散 　　 　　6.        脱离主题 　　 　　7.        字迹潦草 　　 　　怎样改进写作 　　 　　1.        学习写作的步骤和方法 　　 　　2.        学会套题的技巧和思路 　　 　　3.        用好题目的提示和问题 　　 　　4.        使用点睛之句和习语谚语 　　 　　5.        3+1的综合写作模式 　　 　　套题的技巧和思路 　　 　　Water 　　 　　Water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. So we must save and protect water resources. Fix any leaky tap and take a shorter shower. Don’t let the tap run when you brush your teeth. The less water we waste or pollute, the more we’ll have for tomorrow. 　　 　　Things I hate to do        我不喜欢……    (07中考作文) 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        What are the things you hate to do? 　　 　　2.        What do you hate doing most? Why? (Give at least two reasons) 　　 　　You can begin like this : 　　 　　Most of the time I do things that I enjoy. However, there are still things I hate doing, such as … 　　 　　Things I hate to do 　　 　　Most of the time I do things that I enjoy. However, there are still things I hate doing, such as littering or jay-walking. And something I hate doing most is to waste water because water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. So we must save and protect water resources. Fix any leaky tap and take a shorter shower. Don’t let the tap run when you brush your teeth. The less water we waste or pollute, the more we’ll have for tomorrow. 　　 　　Something most I’d like to do        我最想做……  （杨浦区08学年初三期中考作文） 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        What is the thing that you’d most like to do? 　　 　　2.        Why would you like to do it most? (give at least two reasons) 　　 　　Something most I’d like to do is to save and protect water resources, because water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. So we mustn’t waste the water resources. We should fix any leaky tap and take a shorter shower. And we also can’t let the tap run when you brush your teeth. The less water we waste or pollute, the more we’ll have for tomorrow. 　　 　　An Unforgettable Thing                  一件难忘的事    （杨浦区07学年初三期中考作文） 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        When and where did it happen? 　　 　　2.        Why do you think it unforgettable? 　　 　　You can begin like this 　　 　　Everybody has something forgettable. For me … was such a story. 　　 　　Everybody has something forgettable. For me, an English lesson about water resources was such a story. Last Friday we had an English lesson. From the lesson I knew that water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. After class we all promised to save and protect water resources. The lesson is so important that I’ll remember it forever. 　　 　　On my way to school  上学路上  （杨浦区07学年模拟考作文） 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        I saw … on my way to school. 　　 　　2.        a fire hydrant (消防龙头) was leaking 　　 　　3.        call the firemen 　　 　　4.        ask … to fix the leaky hydrant 　　 　　5.        be late for school 　　 　　6.        be happy 　　 　　Yesterday on my way to school I saw a fire hydrant was leaking. I was very worried because I knew that water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. So we must save and protect water resources. I immediately called the firemen and asked them to fix the leaky hydrant. After that, I went to school. Although I was late, I felt very happy. 　　 　　A story about my parents       爸爸妈妈的故事         （08年上海试运转作文） 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        take every opportunity to … 　　 　　2.        if the tap is leaky … 　　 　　3.        when they brush … 　　 　　4.        told me … 　　 　　My parents always take every opportunity to save water. If the tap is leaky, they will fix it at once. When they brush their teeth, they never let the tap run. They often tell me that water is one of the most important natural resources in the world. Man can’t live without water. But only 3% of the water is fresh water and 5% of the fresh water is available in lakes and rivers. From their words I learned the importance of saving water. I think although my parents are ordinary people, they are real heroes in my heart. 　　 　　I want to do something for my school     我想为学校做点事     （09年中考作文） 　　 　　Suggestions: 　　 　　1.        What do you want to do for your school? 　　 　　2.        Why do you want to do it? 　　 　　3.        How are you going to do it? 　　 　　用好题目的提示和问题 　　 　　06年中考作文 　　 　　Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “I Have a Dream.” 　　 　　Sentence patterns for reference: 　　 　　1.        My dream is to be …/ to do…/to go … 　　 　　2.        I enjoy…/ like …/prefer… 　　 　　3.        To make my dream come true, I … 　　 　　4.        If my dream comes true, … 　　 　　My dream is to be a teacher. I think that the students are very lovely. To make my dream come true, I will study harder. I will read more books in order to broaden my mind and enrich my knowledge. It goes without saying that No pains, no gains. Practice makes perfect. If my dream comes true, I’ll treat my students as my best friends. 　　 　　Everybody has his own dream. My dream is to be a tour guide. Some people may think it’s tiring to be a tour guide. But I don’t think so because I can visit many places of interest around the world and I can learn different culture and customs. Besides, I can also meet different people in different places. So I really want to be a guide. It is an exciting job. To make my dream come true, I must study geography well. I think through my hard work, my dream will come true in the future. 　　 　　07年中考作文 　　 　　Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Things I Hate to Do.” 　　 　　Use the following points as a guide. 　　 　　1.        What are the things that you hate to do? 　　 　　2.        What do you hate doing most? Why ? (Give at least two reasons) 　　 　　Things I hate to do 　　 　　Most of the time I do things that I enjoy. However, there are still things I hate to do … 　　 　　Most of the time I do things that I enjoy. However, there are still things I hate to do. I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The things that I hate doing most is smoking. As we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves not also harmful to others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke, I think. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. 　　 　　08年中考作文 　　 　　Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Love around me” 　　 　　Use the following points as a guide. 　　 　　1.        Is there any love around you? 　　 　　2.        How do you feel when you get love from him/ her/ them? 　　 　　3.        What are you going to do to show your love? 　　 　　(1)There is love around me. For example, my mother took good care of me when I was sick every day. What’s more, she always buy a lot of drinks and food I like for me, as well as many toys. She also helps with my study so that I can make great progress. Thus (2)I feel deeply moved. I’m thankful to her for the things she did for me these years. So I have made up my mind that (3)I will work harder at my study to show my love to her. 　　 　　It’s widely accepted that everyone needs love. And (1)I think there is always love around me. My parents show love to me by looking after me well. My classmates’ help make me feel their love. (2)I am so moved that words can’t express how much I love them! So I will (3)spare no effort to help my parents do the housework and help my classmates in return. Finally, I really want to say thanks to them from the bottom of my heart. 　　 　　I’m a lucky teenager because (1)there is a lot of love around me. For example, my parents love me very much. They encouraged me to be brave when I failed to pass the 800-meter race last term. I’m very thankful to them. Their love makes me (2)feel warm and powerful. In order to my love, I’m going (3)to help them with the housework. This will enable them have more time to rest. Love around me is great. 　　 　　09年中考作文 　　 　　Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “I’m proud of myself.” 　　 　　Use the following points as a guide. 　　 　　1.        What kind of person are you? 　　 　　2.        What makes you proud yourself? (Give an example/ examples) 　　 　　3.        Why are you proud yourself? 　　 　　(1)I’m a sunny boy with confidence and the joy of life. As a music lover, (2)playing the piano makes me proud of myself. Every day, I often play the piano for a while to relax myself. Also, my family members quite enjoy the wonderful melodies. I believe music is of great power. And playing the piano enables me to learn the joy of life. (3)So, I am proud of myself because I bring happiness to my family as well as myself by playing the piano. 　　 　　(1)I’m person who is always confident and ready to try anything new. However, swimming has once been a nightmare for me after falling into the water. (2)When I finally ruled the water around my body, I felt rather proud of myself. At the beginning of the swimming test, I took a deep breath and then jumped into the water. Fears disappeared when I went straight ahead. (3)I reached the wall in the end full of joy and pride. Since then, I realized the meaning of the saying, ‘Nothing ventured, Nothing gained’! 　　 　　(1)I’m a common student who has the most ordinary face and the most extraordinary personality. I am proud of myself (2)because of my confidence and kindness, especially my strong will. There is a saying, ‘Nothing is impossible.’ This powerful sentence is inspiring. So I meet a trouble, I won’t give up. Instead I fight against it bravely. (3)The strong personality makes me be proud of myself. I have already got ready. Let me give the future a big smile. 　　 　　(1) used to be a shy girl, but after that experience, I have become more and more confident. (2)It was my turn to give a speech to the whole class on how to learn English well. At first, I’m afraid that I nearly wanted to ask the teacher if I could give up the chance. However, I told myself that I should give myself a challenge because it was really necessary for a person to be confident. I prepare a lot and encouraged myself much. At last, to my great happiness, (3)the speech was perfectly successful. I’m proud of myself (3)because I am no longer a shy girl. I’ve changed myself to a girl who is full of confidence. 　　 　　3+1的写作模式 　　 　　3 = 对三个问题的完整回答 　　 　　+ = 对某个重点问题的扩写 　　 　　1 = 点睛之句的点题和收尾 　　 　　The most important things in my life 　　 　　Use the following points as a guide 　　 　　1.        What are the most important things in your life? 　　 　　2.        Which one do you think is the most important thing? 　　 　　3.        Why do you think so? 　　 　　(student’s writing) 　　 　　There are many important things in my life, such as my eyesight, my subject. Now, the most important thing in my life is the test in June. If I do well in it, I will study in a good school, but if I do badly in it, I will study in a school that I don’t want. It’s very important, I think. (62 字) 　　 　　点评：内容空乏，选材俗套，结构不严谨，缺乏立意深刻的中心思想的表达。 　　 　　1.        What are the most important things in your life? 　　 　　Learning to be brave, learning to be confident are the important thing in my life. 　　 　　2.        Which one do you think is the most important thing? 　　 　　I think learning to share is the most important. 　　 　　3.        Why do you think so? 　　 　　It enables us to get more ideas or experience from others. It also shows that we have the ability and will to help others. 　　 　　There are always many important things that may happen in our life. Among them, Learning to be brave, learning to be confident are the important thing in my life. I think learning to share is the most important. “Share” is another word for “exchange with each other”. It enables us to get more ideas or experience from others. It also shows that we have the ability and will to help others. As a famous saying goes: One flower makes no garden, so we should learn to share with others. 　　 　　注意： 　　 　　1.        审题要切中题意 　　 　　2.        描述要条理清楚 　　 　　3.        表达要语句通顺 　　 　　4.        书写要清晰规范 　　 　　5.        身份要绝对避免

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